The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.

The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.
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The given pie chart illustrates the favourite
takeaways
of people in
canada
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Canada
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,
while
the given bar chart illustrates how many
Indian
restaurants
located
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were located
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in
canada
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Canada
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over a period of
fifty five
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fifty-five
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years from 1960 to 2015.
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that Chinese and
Indian
takeaways
are the
favourite
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favourites
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and the number of
Indian
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an Indian
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restaurant
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restaurants
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in
Canada
rose significantly and
then
remainly
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remained
remain
remaining
unchanged over the period given.
Firstly
, Chinese and
Indian
takeaways
accounted for 60% of all takeout, which
are
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34% and 26% respectively. Chinese contributed
one third
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of the total number
favourite
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takeaways
.
Secondly
, the rest are Italian at 10%,
Persian
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and Persian
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9
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%. Mexican, Japanese, Greek and Thai were only 1%.
On the other hand
, the number of
Indian
restaurants located in
Canada
started
around
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500. It
then
rose dramatically over a period of 47 years. It
then
reached a peak of around 9000 in 2007 and stayed relatively unchanged
just
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over 9000 in the following eight years.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words takeaways, canada, indian with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • charts
  • favourite takeaways
  • people in Canada
  • number of Indian restaurants
  • 1960
  • 2015
  • types of takeaways
  • popular
  • 55 years
  • country
  • time frame
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