The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.

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The given pie chart illustrates the favourite

takeaways

of people in

canada

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Canada

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while

the given bar chart illustrates how many

Indian

restaurants

located

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were located

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canada

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Canada

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over a period of

fifty five

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years from 1960 to 2015.

Overall

, it can clearly be seen that Chinese and

Indian

takeaways

are the

favourite

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favourites

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and the number of

Indian

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an Indian

the Indian

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restaurant

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restaurants

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Canada

rose significantly and

then

remainly

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remained

remain

remaining

unchanged over the period given.

Firstly

, Chinese and

Indian

takeaways

accounted for 60% of all takeout, which

are

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34% and 26% respectively. Chinese contributed

one third

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of the total number

favourite

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takeaways

Secondly

, the rest are Italian at 10%,

Persian

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and Persian

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%. Mexican, Japanese, Greek and Thai were only 1%.

On the other hand

, the number of

Indian

restaurants located in

Canada

started

around

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500. It

then

rose dramatically over a period of 47 years. It

then

reached a peak of around 9000 in 2007 and stayed relatively unchanged

just

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over 9000 in the following eight years.

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3Word repetition
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15Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

159 words

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.

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