The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.

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The given pie chart illustrates the favourite

takeaways

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of people in

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canada

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Canada

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while

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the given bar chart illustrates how many

Indian

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restaurants

located

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were located

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canada

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Canada

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over a period of

fifty five

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years from 1960 to 2015.

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, it can clearly be seen that Chinese and

Indian

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takeaways

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are the

favourite

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favourites

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and the number of

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Indian

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an Indian

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restaurant

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restaurants

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Canada

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rose significantly and

then

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remainly

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remained

remain

remaining

unchanged over the period given.

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, Chinese and

Indian

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takeaways

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accounted for 60% of all takeout, which

are

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34% and 26% respectively. Chinese contributed

one third

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one-third

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of the total number

favourite

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of favourite

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takeaways

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, the rest are Italian at 10%,

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and Persian

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%. Mexican, Japanese, Greek and Thai were only 1%.

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, the number of

Indian

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restaurants located in

Canada

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started

around

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500. It

then

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rose dramatically over a period of 47 years. It

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reached a peak of around 9000 in 2007 and stayed relatively unchanged

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over 9000 in the following eight years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words takeaways, canada, indian with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

159 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

charts
favourite takeaways
people in Canada
number of Indian restaurants
1960
2015
types of takeaways
popular
55 years
country
time frame

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The charts below show the favourite takeaways of people in Canada and the number of Indian restaurants in Canada between 1960 and 2015.

Many people who care for the elderly do not have enough time to look after them. What are the problems related to this. What are some possible solutions

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe it is better to raise children in the city, while others consider the countryside to be a more suitable choice. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The major cities in the world are growing fast, as well as their problems. What are the problems that young peopl living in cities are facing with? Give solutions to these problems