Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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It is true that there are more unhealthy
people
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trying
to
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alternative
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medicines
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and
treatments
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rather than going to see their usual doctor. I think
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is a negative development for the following reasons.
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with, there
are
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complex
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the complex
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background
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backgrounds
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of
alternative
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medicines
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and
treatments
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.
People
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have no idea about where the
medicines
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come from and what is support
for
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the
treatments
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. The
medicines
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might be just sugars or vitamins which have no effect
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their disease. What's more, the
medicines
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may even
harmful
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for
people
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as there are maybe some harmful ingredients in
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them
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.
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, the
treatments
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might have no science
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.
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they have
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unreliable
medicines
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and
treatments
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, they might miss the best time for treatment.
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,
alternative
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medicines
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and
treatments
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are usually not covered by
the
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health
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insurance. That makes
people
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pay
extra
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expenditure. If
people
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have chronic diseases which need
a long time
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long time treatments
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treatments
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, that will be
a considerable bills
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a considerable bill
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.
People
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who have
health
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problems may
experence
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experience
a financially strained condition. In conclusion, the growing popularity of
alternative
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medicines
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and
treatments
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among
people
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with
health
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problems is not a positive phenomenon as it could place a bigger financial burden on
people
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, and their
health
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problems might
also
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get worse.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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