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For many young people today, shopping is their favourite free time activity. Why do you think this has happened? Should young people be encouraged to do different activities in their free time?

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In
this
 era, Young
people
 love shopping and in doing so spend a good amount of their time with friends, especially window shopping where
people
 go out to see their favourite things on display.
Moreover
, Society has become increasingly materialistic, obsessed with their appearance and how other
people
 might see them which induces
people
 to buy unnecessary things, leading to credit card debt and so on.
To sum up
, going shopping once in a
while
 is really good for your health, to get fresh air and some quality time with friends and family.
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