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Some parents and teachers agree that the behaviour of children should be strictly controlled. others, however, believe that children should be allowed to do experiment freely . discuss both views and give an opinion

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The issue of whether
children
 should be allowed to do anything freely has been debatable.
While
 some
people
 may think that they should enjoy freedom as
adults
 do, I strongly believe that there are significant evidence and reasons that support why the behaviour of
children
 should be strictly controlled. On one hand,
people
 may argue that all humans are equal,including both
adults
 and
children
,so
children
 should have the right to make their own decisions in daily issues as
adults
 do. If they are monitored by teachers and parents and they only follow the instructions that given by others, they will become nothing but soulless machines.
Also
, some
people
 may think that if teenagers are strictly controlled, they would be living under tremendous pressure, and
hence
, they may have a higher chance of developing mental illness. In extreme cases, kids would be more rebellious and they may even escape from home and school.
On the other hand
,
people
 at a tender age do not have the ability to identify right and wrong and they may easily go astray without proper guidance. Given that teenagers have impressionable minds and they are susceptible to peer pressure. They may resort to doing anything,
such
 as drinking, or abusing drugs, in order to gain peer recognition. Students with little self-restraint may even attempt juvenile delinquency, which is detrimental to their future development.
Also
, guidance from older
people
 may allow
children
 to have better development in a quicker time. Teenagers may be frustrated about different life choices during their growth. Company and advice given by
adults
 are very important as they may help
reducing
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children
's frustration and guide
children
 to make better life decisions in every circumstance.
This
 in turn will flavour their future development. Under
this
 line of thinking, I think kids' behaviour should be monitored and controlled in order to prevent them from going astray.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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