Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both those view and give your own opinion.

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should accept
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unreasonable
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or
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to
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the
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has aroused concern among various circles. Divergent as
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's views on
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issue in question may be, I personally believe that we should try our best to improve the unsatisfactory status. On one hand, some
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say that we should accept the bad
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because they think that there are many
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cannot
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that cannot
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be changed
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matter you do, and the best way is to bear it and the bad
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will pass as
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time pass.
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, let's try to imagine that you and your friend are hired by the same company and
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the same position.
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, your salary is lower than your
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. It is because your friend is
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than you.
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, the boss like him more and give him a high salary, which is nothing that we can do to
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our face to look like.
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, some
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think that their
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are
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simliar
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similar
with
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this
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example. and they have nothing to do can
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it.
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, I believe that we should try to make our
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better , even if we are dealing
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same
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like
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as
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the
pervious
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previous
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example. You never know that it is possible to
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if you never try to do something about it.
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, you can try to work harder in order to
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attach
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your superior's attention.
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, you can go to negotiate with your boss about
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the improvement
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of your current
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. You may get a higher salary or not, but you never know the answer if you never try.
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, we should try hard to
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it what matter
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you
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we
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are dealing with. Under
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line of thinking, it seems to me that
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somethings
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some things
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cannot be changed like our face, there are many ways that we can do to make
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better.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Contentment
  • Resilience
  • Personal growth
  • Endurance
  • Initiative
  • Advancement
  • Catalyst
  • Financial stability
  • Status quo
  • Innovation
  • Missed opportunities
  • Life satisfaction
  • Adverse situations
  • Taking control
  • Risk assessment
  • Change management
  • Self-improvement
  • Motivation
  • Stagnation
  • Proactivity
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