In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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It is popularly believed that in recent years agriculture is well developed, so why are there many places in the world where people are still hungry?
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the fact they have an opportunity to buy it and import it.
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, when it comes to poorer ones it is approximately impossible. Giving an example, Africa has a problem with hunger,
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of not possessing any machine which could improve agriculture, which is connected
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a lack of money. What is more, they don't have pleasant grounds for vegetables or fruits. Well-developed countries offer help, but they want to sell their products, not just give them. To resolve
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issue first thought would be charity action. They are first-class options, and there are plenty of places where you have the opportunity to give some food to people who go hungry.
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they are good for a short period of time. From an economic point of
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a wealthy region should invest some money to develop a poorer community. Both sides will get some benefits.
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, they can buy a huge area and try to develop it by buying a special machine and hiring people to work. As far as I am concerned,
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the charity actions. Regions which have money should invest in less developed places.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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