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Some people think that teenagers should follow the old generation but others believe that they sould challenge the old thoughts. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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 young
generation
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while
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 think that they should chase
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ancient thoughts .
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I am
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 the view that there should be some parameters for youngsters ,to obey and challenge old
people
. There
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lot
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 of morality
which
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kept by
older
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the older
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generation
 at their times and they are still
practicing
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in
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it in
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 their daily
life
. Following that habits and
attitude
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attitudes
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 in the
life
 of
upcoming
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the upcoming
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generation
 will help them to
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create
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 a profound impact on their
life
 . The attitude towards
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life
such
 as saving wealth for future
generation
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generations
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, avoiding unnecessary
expenditure
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expenditures
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 and
practicing
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practising
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 religious ceremonies are some valuable habits of old
people
 and which can
br
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be
copy
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in
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 young
people
's
life
 .so in that context following elder
people
 is worth full in
life
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On the other hand
 , there were a lot of myths and traditions carried out by
old
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the old
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generation
 and they are compelling
the
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teenagers to follow
such
 superstitious beliefs. These prompts from their grand partners should be avoided
,
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so that they can
be
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adhere to the new technologies and developments of
modern
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the modern
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 world.
For instance
 ,
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there
theee
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there
were
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was
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 certain days
considers
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 as bad and didn't allow
people
 to attend celebrations.it should be changed and challenged by the young
people
 and look forward to
make
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 a successful full
life
 rather than
follow
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following
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 the superstitions There are some points which can
be adopt
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be adopted
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by the new
generation
 from
ther
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the
 old
people
 , which help them to keep values and trust in
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life
 . These ideas can help them to
succed
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succeed
 in the future and create a fruitful
life
 .
In
contrast
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 the traditional and unnecessary
believes
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beliefs
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 should be eradicated from the community, and it's the obligation of upcoming generations .
Hence
 they should challenge these myths which
carried
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were carried
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 out by their ancestors.
To sum up
 ,even though there are certain
practise
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 which the young
generation
 should follow from their elder
people
 , they should ask questions and chase their elders in the case
myths
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of myths
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 and traditions. So that
the
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society can
be go
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 forward more scientifically and technically
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