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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions.

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Nowadays, some businesses mentioned their freshers are out of interpersonal
skills
such
 as cooperative
skills
.In
this
 ,essay we will discuss causes and measures to be implemented by Schools and Universities to minimize the number of unemployment in the near future.
To begin
 with, most of the educational systems are now running behind scoring high marks to get desired colleges rather than getting practical knowledge for their bright future.If they get pursue
skills
 in school, they will not suffer in their job.The pupils were more into theoretical knowledge than practical activities.To avoid
this
 situation, all
students
 must seek their management
skills
 development by implementing seminars, lectures and games which will be more interactive towards the team.It will help them to learn communication, problem-solving, teamwork and cooperation in team assignments,leadership quality, and critical thinking among same-aged
students
 which will boost their abilities to manage groups in the future ahead.They
also
 can take internships with senior
students
 will help them to learn a lot.
In addition
, the employer
also
 should take responsibility to encourage their freshers by providing additional training during the probation period to improve themselves and it is
also
 an individual's interest to enrich their qualities with their own effort. By summarizing, I strongly believe that lack of interpersonal
skills
 will not be the only reason for new employees there may be other reasons too. So
this
 issue can be rectified by implementing practical activities to encourage the pupil's better outcomes before their graduation.
Furthermore
, once the
students
 are trained properly through various programmes,the lack of soft
skills
 in new hires will be resolved.
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