Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, an alarming number of diseases increased

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. there are few individuals who are arguing to make it expensive compare to natural

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to reduce its consumption. I strongly affirm

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statement and my viewpoint is elaborated

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, sugary

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are easily available in the market. It is not only cheaper in cost but

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their marketing is attractive. Their advertisements on billboards and TV are targeting the young generation and as a

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result children prefer to have coke and sandwiches in their meals rather than have healthy

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and natural juices made with fruits

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as mango, orange, and pineapple. These carbohydrate

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invite diseases like diabetes, high blood pressure and obesity. It is significantly important to reduce its usage to improve our health life.

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, to reduce

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ratio, the government should

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high taxes on

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unhealthy

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items

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to make them expensive. If sugary

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are costly compared to natural

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only the public will move towards real

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.

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,

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year in Germany, the government applied high taxes on tobacco to reduce its consumption and they got

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and the usage of tobacco decreased dramatically. It shows that people have fewer choices as it is directly knocking on their pockets. In summary, If real

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are cheaper than sugary

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only adults will move to natural

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and they will encourage their children, too. The increasing rate of sugar-added

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is the best possible way to reduce its consumption and get a healthy lifestyle.