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Computers today can quickly and accurately translate languages, therefore, it is a waste of time to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#computers #languages #waste #time #language
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opinion
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uptake
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foreign
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language
bring
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 time-wasting because the new technologies can interpret easily and fast in any foreign
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.From my way of thinking exploring
the
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many
languages
 is profitable for all
people
.
This
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along with
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people
 think that many teenagers
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 a lot of foreign
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 is caused by wasting time
because
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in our modern
life
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 humans can translate any foreign text and speech with
computer
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a computer
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 or phone through the new program
that
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created
for
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 translate
languages
 because
this
 way is very fast and comfortable.Modern technologies bring to our life instantly and facile
therefore
 many believe that the need to learn
languages
 is decreasing among young teenagers because
this
 no need to spend months or even years to learn
a new
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languages
.
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hand
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 the cause I disagree
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a
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numerous
of
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people
 learning
foreign
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language
 in order to visit
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abroad and study
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favorite
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 University and they may have opportunities for learning a new
language
 not only explore but
also
 they may learn the foreign
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 culture and its very beneficial for them.If humans learn a foreign
language
 and other
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 traditions and culture they might be
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 outlook and wealthy new vocabulary and they would
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 very clever and smart.
In addition
 to that many linguists argue that learning
languages
 improves memorization and that it helps
people
 with memory problems. In conclusion,some
people
 think that exploring
the
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different
languages
 is bring to waste of time because new technologies
such
 as computers and phones can clearly and fast translate the
languages
.In my
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opinion
opinoin
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this
 is profitable for all
people
 and
people
 who
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 learning
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few
languages
is
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have a rich outlook and
wealthy
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a wealthy
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 vocabulary.
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