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Some experts believe that it is better to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#experts #language #school #outweigh
Acquiring
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ability to handle a foreign
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media
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 to earn
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some specialists ,it will be effective if the study of international linguistics
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from
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 early
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 disadvantages
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this
 process , the advantages are
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highlighted. The early learning of a foreign
language
 can create
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some difficulties in
early
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the early
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 stage of a student's life
such
 as
,
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phonics and
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alphabets
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little
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 bit complicated. They have to spend
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 of their study time
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practicing
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writing and reading ,
hence
 it may affect their learning of other subjects. The culture and techniques of the new
language
 could be sophisticated and will take more time to adopt
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the
language
 . So it is
quiet
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 difficult for the children
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 in
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early schooldays.
On the other hand
 , obtaining a new
language
 rather than their mother tongue will help to earn more
knowledge
 and
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 interaction with international communities.
As a result
, they are getting familiar with the incidents and interventions which happening in the whole world.
This
 will enhance their thinking process and prompt their eagerness to learn more lessons.
For instance
, in
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 of students
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exposure
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international
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the international
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 community. So learning
foreign
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language
 create a lot of chance to improve their
knowledge
.
Furthermore
, studying a foreign
language
 in early
school
days
 will help them to learn it thoroughly
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so that when they grow up they can easily handle that
language
 and help them seek
for
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international job opportunities.
In addition
 to that it will make them more capable to interact and get attached
with
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 other individuals from nooks and corners of the globe.
Overall
 learning
foreign
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language
 in early
school
days
 will create professional growth when the children grow up
To sum up
, even if there are some disadvantages
for
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 learning foreign languages in early
school
days
 like
learning
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 burden, the benefits
such
 as earning more
knowledge
 , getting
chance
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 to interact with
international
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 community and professional growth are highlighted
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