Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

Many
people
argued that
experiments
on living
things
like
animals
are
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violation
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. These
people
assert that
animals
can feel pain like humans do, so we have to stop animal
tests
.
However
, If experimentation on
animals
were not conducted, there will be nothing for
people
to cure or care
materials
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. Some
people
argue that animal
tests
are
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by a human, because
animals
also
have
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to live, that human
being
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can not abuse those
things
. At the same time, living
things
like rats, pigs and other
animals
would feel fatal pain from animal
tests
. Of
course
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this
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assertions are true, but living in modern times, eliminating animal
experiments
is
unevitable
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inevitable
. Thanks to the progress of medicine, many
people
have a chance to live longer and even cure their
body
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bodies
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. At
this
moment, animal
tests
are
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key point.
For instance
, by testing
animals
to create drugs to cure cancer,
people
who suffered from cancer can be cured and live longer.
In addition
,
people
who want to be a parent
although
they have no ability to carry a baby,
also
have benefits
through
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animal
experiments
. Because it can not be conducted
to
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humans,
things
like using a uterus. So we use
animals
to find these solutions, at
this
point, we can find our benefits from animal
experiments
.
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, owing to experimentation on
animals
, nowadays
people
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past. If the
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technique
develops, we might consider getting rid of those
experiments
, but
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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