IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

The chart below shows the result of a survey about poeple's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five australian cities.

The chart below shows the result of a survey about poeple's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five australian cities.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
This
Linking Words
 bar graph displays the data collected in a survey about the
coffee
Use synonyms
 and tea buying habits of
residents
Use synonyms
 in five
cities
Use synonyms
 in Australia in the
last
Linking Words
 four weeks.
Overall
Linking Words
, in all the
cities
Use synonyms
 except
Adelaide
Use synonyms
, more people went to café for
coffee
Use synonyms
 or tea than bought instant
coffee
Use synonyms
 or fresh
coffee
Use synonyms
. In
Adelaide
Use synonyms
, going to a cafe and buying instant
coffee
Use synonyms
 were equally common. Most
residents
Use synonyms
 in Melbourne, Hobart, Sydney, and Brisban visited a cafe for
coffee
Use synonyms
 or tea, at approximately 64, 63, 62 and 55 per
cent
Use synonyms
 respectively,
whereas
Linking Words
 just under half of
residents
Use synonyms
 in
Adelaide
Use synonyms
 did so. These five
cities
Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
 had roughly half of the
residents
Use synonyms
 purchasing instant
coffee
Use synonyms
, and the figures in Hobart and Brisbane were almost 55 per
cent
Use synonyms
. In comparison, the proportion of people who bought fresh
coffee
Use synonyms
 was never as high as 45 per
cent
Use synonyms
 in any of the five
cities
Use synonyms
, with those in Brisbane and
Adelaide
Use synonyms
, both at nearly 35 per
cent
Use synonyms
, less likely than those in the other three
cities
Use synonyms
 to do so. (Reference: IELTS Eassy Bank https://www.ieltsessaybank.com/
coffee
Use synonyms
-buying-habits/)

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
▼
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, residents, cities, adelaide, cent with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: