Your family is going to move to another town. Write a letter to the Principal of a local school asking if they will accept your son. Describe his academic achievements and scope of interests. You do NOT need to write any address.

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Dear Mr. Ronald My name is Vairag Patel, I am planning to move to Bracebridge with my family, the purpose of

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letter is to request admission for my child to your academy, my junior is studying 10th standard at Jhon Harbort

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, I searched about your institute, and I am very impressed with the facilities of your campus, students are facilitated with indoor and outdoor sports, and smart classrooms and you have well-trained tutors who provide theoretical and practical knowledge. My son is a brilliant student, he got 95% in 9th standard, and his previous institute offered him a scholarship for excellent academic performance, he is

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a very active and disciplined individual.

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, my child is

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interested in sports, he received state-level appreciation with a gold medal in football, your outdoor sports facilities and personal guidance from the coach will improve his game and he may participate at the national level in future. I look forward to your response, and let me know if you need

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information about me or my boy. Yours Sincerely, Vairag

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single idea per paragraph

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complete response

Consider adding specific questions about the admission process or any required documents to demonstrate full task completion.

greeting and closing

The greeting and closing are both polite and appropriate, reflecting a respectful tone.

complete response

The letter provides a comprehensive overview of the son's academic and extracurricular achievements, effectively meeting the task requirements.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

180 words

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