The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map depicts a projection of a new
school
which will be built in Canterbury.
Overall
, the first estimation place will be located in the countryside,
whereas
the second planned area will be focused in the town centre. In detail, the first estimation will be built in the village which is located close to Sturry.
This
place will be easier to access,
according to
the fact that
this
place is
also
nearby the residential area, even though it will be crowded because it is
also
nearby the main road.
Moreover
, students from Chartham will be challenged to go to the
school
because of the
further
distance.
On the other hand
, the second option will be constructed in the centre of the town. The advantage of
this
option is there is no traffic zone,
whereas
the adverse effect is the location which is equidistant from both Chartham and Sturry.
Nevertheless
, there is
also
a pedestrian zone near the
school
which should be considered before building the new
school
.
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