The map below is of the town of Canterbury. A new school (S) is planned for the area. The map shows two possible sites for the school. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map depicts a projection of a new
school
which will be built in Canterbury. Use synonyms
Overall
, the first estimation place will be located in the countryside, Linking Words
whereas
the second planned area will be focused in the town centre.
In detail, the first estimation will be built in the village which is located close to Sturry. Linking Words
This
place will be easier to access, Linking Words
according to
the fact that Linking Words
this
place is Linking Words
also
nearby the residential area, even though it will be crowded because it is Linking Words
also
nearby the main road. Linking Words
Moreover
, students from Chartham will be challenged to go to the Linking Words
school
because of the Use synonyms
further
distance.
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On the other hand
, the second option will be constructed in the centre of the town. The advantage of Linking Words
this
option is there is no traffic zone, Linking Words
whereas
the adverse effect is the location which is equidistant from both Chartham and Sturry. Linking Words
Nevertheless
, there is Linking Words
also
a pedestrian zone near the Linking Words
school
which should be considered before building the new Use synonyms
school
.Use synonyms
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