In recent years, the birth rate in most developed countries is predicted to begin to fall over the next 50 years. By 2070 it is estimated that over a third of the population in most developed countries will be aged 65 and over. What effects will these predictions have on developed countries if they prove true? What can be done now to deal with this situation?
In almost all developed
countries
, the birth
rate is predicted to fall over in the next 50 years. It is estimated that around 33 percent
of the population in most developed Change the spelling
per cent
countries
will be ages
65 and over. Wrong verb form
aged
This
prediction will lead developed countries
into some problems.
One of the problems might
occur is the Correct pronoun usage
that might
lackness
of youngsters in the future. Lack of workforce would lead Correct your spelling
blackness
slackness
countries
even developed countries
into a fall. Every country needs young people which in their productive age to continue the country’s development. If this
problem is not handled seriously by the government, worse situations might occur such
as,
the decrease of Remove the comma
apply
country’s
income because Correct article usage
the country’s
lack
of Change preposition
of lack
workforce
, the elders would dominate the country which is bad for Correct article usage
a workforce
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the nations’
nations’
development, and the worst one is Change noun form
nation’s
extinction
of the population.
These outcomes are caused by several reasons, one of which is the citizen’s readiness to have a child is low. Another thing that might cause Add an article
the extinction
this
problem are
the awareness of the people about ‘overpopulation’, and their surroundings or their workplace which do not Change the verb form
is
supports
Change the verb form
support
for
families who want to have a child. There are Change preposition
apply
couple
of solutions that government could do Add an article
a couple
due to
make the birth
rate rise again such
as,
paying the citizens whenever they give Remove the comma
apply
a
Remove the article
apply
birth
to a new-born baby, giving educations
through seminars or workshops about the importance of having Fix the agreement mistake
education
a next generations
for the country’s future, and the Correct the article-noun agreement
a next generation
next generations
last
is making some regulations such
as banning abortions and supporting birth
out of marriage.
In summary, the bad effects from
the decreased Change preposition
of
birth
rate could affect a nation’s situations
. Fix the agreement mistake
situation
However
, a
right action is needed from the government in order to increase the numbers Correct article usage
the
such
as giving support to a family who are
having a child, education through seminars, and enforcing regulations.Change the verb form
is
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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