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Spending wisely and getting into the habit of saving from an early age is important. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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Some people think that we should get used to knowing about the
economy
 and saving from our childhood. I think that it's good to know about difficulties and save funds, but it
also
 can affect children in a negative way, because nowadays the inner
world
 of kids is one of the important things and we cannot understand their own
world
. If their parents forced them into the
economy
 in the
future
 they can start to be shy
,
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 and closed and start saving on all the details. Nowadays for children and their ,
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behavior
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 parents starts to pay more attention,
as well as
 about the
economy
, the inner
world
, character and etc.
For example
, if adults start to give only with negative side and cannot explain to their kids how to use
money
 or even thing they cannot catch it and start to overthink. And it can affect their
future
, for ,
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 they will start to think and calculate everything. ,
Furthermore
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 they will start to the
economy
 on themselves and their needs and I think it's not good when you cannot buy something for yourself or for close people in your life. And it's not about brilliants. As regards other sides of it, I think that parents should care about everything and every step of the life of their kid.
For example
, if their daughter or son received
money
 as a gift and it's clear that children cannot spend
money
 on something useful, because they want new video games, telephones or toys. I suggest that if we will explain and show the positive features of spending
money
 or saving it, they will start to be intelligent and discipline themselves. In conclusion, each of us has
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 opinion and we can split it up into pros and cons. And from little ,things we can explain how
this
 thing can share with good facilities in the
future
 and be clear, carefully about our explanations. Because it can impact our society, inner
world
 and even our
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 other's
future
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