The use of smartphones is decreasing our collective intelligence because we are reliant on the technology not on our own minds. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, It's
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topic that Add an article
a hot
technology
is replacing human's
own Change noun form
human
intelligence
.
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, AI for autmobile
vehicles, and so on.
Compared to Correct your spelling
automobile
20th
century, It's true that Correct article usage
the 20th
human
use Fix the agreement mistake
humans
technology
especially in IT fields for convenient reasons. smartphone
has lots of functions for searching Add an article
the smartphone
suitable
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for suitable
depend
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depending
searching
for Correct word choice
and searching
correct
location which had never imagined in past. More often Correct article usage
the correct
human's
are using Change noun form
humans
technology
, Correct word choice
and that
that
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and
technology
developed more to make daily life easy.
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apply
technology
has developed as Correct article usage
a human's
human's
need, there's some opinion that Change noun form
human
people
are less using brain
for gathering information
by themselves. Some people
are worrying that thinking less due to
high technology
development would ultimately impact on
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apply
brain
function
.
I agree that high-end technology
would influence the way of using brain
, but not totally agree that It would decrease the Add an article
the brain
a brain
intelligence
of Add an article
a human
human
.
It's been always debating Fix the agreement mistake
humans
topic
that high-developed Add an article
a topic
technology
is a threat to human's
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human
intelligence
, but we can see that developing technology
had been made human
to Fix the agreement mistake
humans
adjusted
to a new environment in a different way.
Nowadays, Change the form of the verb
adjust
ChatGPT
comes out to search on specific topics and to summarize something if people
want to get information
in their way. Even though ChatGPT
could summarize data from internet information
well, It doens't
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doesn't
mean
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means
ChatGPT
has intelligence
as human
. It could replace Fix the agreement mistake
humans
function
of gathering Data, but It doesn't guarantee that Add an article
the function
ChatGPT
is thinking
creature. At least, before Correct article usage
a thinking
get
any Change the verb form
getting
information
from ChatGPT
, Human suppose to put key words
or ideas so they could search.
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keywords
In other words
, Human's
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humans
function
to
get close to what they want as Add a missing verb
is to
answer
, Add an article
an answer
the answer
people
should make their brain
more Fix the agreement mistake
brains
focusing
on ideas than Wrong verb form
focused
more
collecting ideas.
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apply
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In
a
conclusion, A smartphone Correct article usage
apply
is not influence
on Change the verb form
is not influenced
is not influencing
intellectual
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the intellectual
function
of brain
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the brain
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