espite a large number of gyms, a sedentary lifestyle is gaining popular in the contemporary world. What problems are associated with this? What solutions can you suggest

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life
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technology
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development and a huge industry level
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continuously
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growth
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every day. In spite
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, nowadays a
sport
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life
famous over the world
while
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humans are choosing a sitting lifestyle and
that is
fashionable.
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development poses a
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number
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range of steps can be taken to counteract them. One issue concern is
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for the reason
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life
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internet and devices
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, people tend simple
life
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by high groups of inhabitants , so recently times 'BOLT FOOD and WOLT'
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utilise
and that
develoments
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developments
damage human health and lifestyle. Indeed,
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activities
are intend
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from
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youngsters and older people. Another common problem is playing games so
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in 2000 . Especially, that development is
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harmful
for children because do not control by parents.
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groups. In the meantime, have disadvantages
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health and mental
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solution
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,
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governments must
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using apps and give
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a limit
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limit
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on
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by new innovation acts.
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possible solution is
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parents
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attention child's improvement.
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physical
works
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over
them
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child
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. In conclusion, I hope that problems damages decrease
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a
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next decade, the
goverments
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governments
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and parents give particular effort
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fields
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. Every innovation
have
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benefits at the same time disadvantages.
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