espite a large number of gyms, a sedentary lifestyle is gaining popular in the contemporary world. What problems are associated with this? What solutions can you suggest

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is more popular in 21 century because
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technology
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every day. In spite
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, nowadays a
sport
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life
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famous over the world
while
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,
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humans are choosing a sitting lifestyle and
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fashionable.
This
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development poses a
nuber
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number

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of problems,
a
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range of steps can be taken to counteract them. One issue concern is
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a technology
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for the reason
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tendency impact to population
life
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.
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, these days each home and building have
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internet and devices
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to
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, people tend simple
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, telephone applications are
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by high groups of inhabitants , so recently times 'BOLT FOOD and WOLT'
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and that
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developments

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damage human health and lifestyle. Indeed,
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activities
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youngsters and older people. Another common problem is playing games so
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situation was created
since
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in 2000 . Especially, that development is
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for children because do not control by parents.
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by all age
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groups. In the meantime, have disadvantages
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health and mental
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solution
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governments must
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using apps and give
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, that condition is
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by new innovation acts.
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parents
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attention child's improvement.
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, they ought to
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works
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. In conclusion, I hope that problems damages decrease
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next decade, the
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and parents give particular effort
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fields
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benefits at the same time disadvantages.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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