The chart below shows the sleep patterns of people in five different occupations according to a Canadian study. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Please try to write at least 150 words.
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The chart below illustrates the results of a Canadian study on how much and in which
hours
of the day do people in five different jobs sleep?
The red bars show the times an average individual in each of these occupations is expected to be asleep.
An average student sleeps from 11 Change the punctuation
.
PM
to 7 AM. Therefore
, they usually get 8 hours
of sleep, which is the highest hours
of sleep among the five Correct quantifier usage
number of hours
role
mentioned in Change to a plural noun
roles
this
chart. Truck Drivers are expected to be sleeping in
two separate times Change preposition
at
of
each day, which is from 4 Change preposition
apply
PM
to 7 PM
, and 7 AM to 10 PM
, which is a total of 6 hours
of sleep per night
. Truckers are the only people here, who do not get any sleep during the night
, as a result
of being on duty during night
time.
Similar to Truck Drivers, mothers rest in
two different times. Their sleeping schedule is from 10 Change preposition
at
PM
to 6 AM, however
, they get up at 1 AM,
and go to bed 2 Remove the comma
apply
hours
before that at 3 AM. As a result
, they get 6 hours
of sleep. On average, Business Executives intend to get 6 hours
of sleep per night
. They go to bed at 11 PM
and wake up at 5 AM, which means that they wake up earlier than Full-time moms and Students.
Finally
, the Canadian study,
shows information that Doctors get the least amount of sleep, Remove the comma
apply
between
the five groups of people in Change preposition
among
this
chart. They usually sleep at 1 AM, get up at 3 AM, and continue their sleeping schedule an hour later, up to 7 AM.
In conclusion, students get the most sleep and
Doctors get the least sleepCorrect word choice
apply
,
and TruckersRemove the comma
apply
.
Add a missing verb
do.
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