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In many parts of the world, water sources are becoming more polluted what are the effects of this problem? what can be done to combat it?

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In today's world,
the
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nations are facing one of the biggest problems
such
 as
water
pollution
 in their countries. There are many different reasons
of
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the
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water
pollution
. From my point of view, the governments can interfere in
this
 menace
by
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 distinctive implications yet, I will support my ideas with examinations as well. On one hand, since
then
industrilization
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industrialisation
 and manufacturing output, the world
have
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 been changing negatively. Oil production companies,
pertochemical
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petrochemical
petrochemicals
 operations and
also
 shipping affect undoubtedly
this
 condition. After taking place an accident
in
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oil
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an oil
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 company, a huge amount of
liquides
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liquids
liquid
 leak into the sea and dangerous chemicals destroy the creatures who live in the seashores.
For instance
, In April 2010,
as a result
 of
explosion
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an explosion
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on
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in
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 Deepwater
Horrizon
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Horizon
, a catastrophic oil
spilled
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 into the Gulf of Mexico. The cost of devastation was estimated extremely huge.
Furthermore
, the
branchs
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branches
branch
 of rivers and channels are used so hugely
trade
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 purposes by the countries. During the delivery period, the ships leak
extremely
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an extremely
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amount
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amounts
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 of
petrols
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petrol
kinds of petrol
cans of petrol
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 into the
water
 sources.
In addition
,
the
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human
activites
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activities
 can cause directly and accelerate
this
 process. Because lots of visitors, tourists, at
the
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same time locals throw away a number of
garbages
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garbage
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 into the sea during their summer vacations or holidays
in
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every year,
however
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 there are many
measurements
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measures
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 to solve
water
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the water
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pollution
 problem. First and foremost, with regard to the government
implement
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 some protocols regarding increasing awareness of protecting
water
 areas among people. Some boards are put on the seashores where
public
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spend
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their
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time more.
Moreover
, the countries can
ratificate
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ratification
 the agreements regarding preserving
of
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the
water
 sources. In the nutshell,
water
 sources play
vital
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 role in
the
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people's lives. Because many citizens live in
remote
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area
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areas
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, they can only bring their butter and bread from fishing. If the
precentage
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percentage
 of
the
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water
pollution
 increase in the next future, it will cause the migration of
the
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folks.
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