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Where there can be various definitions of creativity or being creative. I believe, "Creativity is simply connecting new dots in new ways". It is a tool to add, integrate, expand, augment and put value to a product or a service. In the same way, I would like to take
this
 opportunity to narrate an experience where I have been successful to encounter an existing issue at my friend's dairy product manufacturing plant. I vividly remember when I was in the final year of my B tech course my friend faced a plethora of difficulties regarding the low amount of
milk
 in their own dairy farm at the time of summer. I advised him it is very difficult to produce a sufficient amount of
milk
 for making the product. Interestingly I find a solution in which we collected
milk
 from the nearby
milk
 shade area.
Moreover
,we have decided you make it to the farmer on the basis of
fat
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 and SNF of the
milk
 which can easily be detected by a
milk
 analyser
this
 creative idea not only solved the problem of procurement of
milk
 but
also
 provide
the
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a
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 source of income to the farmer. These
change
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changes
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 as a whole
proof
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proves
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 to be beneficial for my
friend
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friend's
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 business and definitely made daily
operation
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operations
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 efficient.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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