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Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation. Excessive use of private cars is considered to be the main reason for the traffic jam in many cities and that's why the use of public transportation is encouraged. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of using public transport?

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 the Pedagogical University. I had been learning for five years. It was
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 work. We had fun together, had gone to the cinema, clubs,
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. We had felt in love. We learned to build relationships. We were carefree and happy. I got free
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got the grant and sometimes I worked. I can afford to buy
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 things which I wanted and sure which were available at the time. I haven’t learned enough good. I often missed lectures and practice
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I didn’t plan to be
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. During my studies, I went in for sports,
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. I was active
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 of society.
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