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in many places, new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. what is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
Nowadays,
countryside
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 is
one
 of the
area
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areas
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 where you can find the
naturally
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 wild, or get a vacation
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and
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relax with your family.
This
 place
associated
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is associated
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 with some type of nature, which haven’t connected with people in
constraction
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construction
 or building factory. But humanitarian has a growth statistic of
popullation
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population
. And every year it is upper and upper. With
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help of it, in fact, we ask
a
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 question ‘
where
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Where
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 will we live in the future?’. The humanitarian has two ways, the first is
build
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to build
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more
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apply
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higher
building
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buildings
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 or apartment
house
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houses
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for
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with
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 more floors.
And the
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 second way
propose
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proposes
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 us build a
countryside
regions
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region
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. In my
mind
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mind,
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 every type has advantages and disadvantages .
Let
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Let's
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 start to discuss. There are cities
regions
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and regions
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 where located a lot of old buildings and houses, which have
an
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awful
condition
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conditions
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, sometimes it
dangerous
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is dangerous
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 for people. It is a reason it must be destroyed and cleaned area for rebuilding new
one
 or for the relax zone. But the
reasone
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reason
reasons
 they don’t is cost.
It
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It is
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 more expensive
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than
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then
the build
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building
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 on new area,
cause
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because
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 you must pay
for
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to
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 destroy, reload the ground and take out the rubbish. And
ofcourse
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of course
 don’t forget communications. Roads must be built or rebuilt, and
this
 case would be cheaper too. But the other side of the problem is wild landscapes and nature with their residents. If we build new homes in the
countryside
, we
would
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will
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loose
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lose
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 some kind of
this
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apply
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nature, which we never see in future. The other reason is pollution. It's no secret that cities and
town
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towns
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produced
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 a lot of waste which
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is
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located
nearby
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near
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 the
last
, if they don’t have
recycle
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a recycling
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 method of course. I think Israel
do
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 the best way. They have
plan
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a plan
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 to change
old
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the old
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 shabby building. Old
one
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ones
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 they destroy and rebuild new
one
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ones
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, which
more
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are
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 higher
then
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than
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 old
one
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ones
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 and have more
floor
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floors
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 and flats in the build.
For
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this
way
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way,
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israelis
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Israelis
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 solve the problem
growing
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of growing
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 citizens in their country without building
countryside
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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