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stress-related illnesses are becoming increasingly common. what do you think are the causes of this? what slutions can you suggest?

#illnesses #slutions
it is true that the number of diseases
cased
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caused
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 by stress
have
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 been increased
nowdays
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. in
this
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i
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 will explain the causes of stress-related illnesses including violent domestic life and
deprassion
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depression
 and
also
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 will introduce solutions for
this
 phenomenon including
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 help from
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a spychologist
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spychologist
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psychologist
psychologists
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do
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 regular activities like yoga. having violent domestic life and
deprassion
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depression
 can lead to several stress-related sicknesses.
parents
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 arguments, divorces and toxic relationships can pose grave mental
diseas
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disease
diseases
such
 as
deprassion
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depression
.
for example
, it has been proven by
massive
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 scale of
researchs
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research
 that most of the
stomac-ache
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stomach aches
 that people have are caused by stress
,
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because the
norons
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neurons
norms
 of our body are really sensitive and with any sign of
tention
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tension
, it can become ill.
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