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The pie graph given illustrates the producing amount of
oil
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 measured in barrels per day(units:
MB
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/D) in terms of seven areas in the world in 2001.
Overall
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, the main production was contributed by the middle east. Africa was followed, and the lowest-producing ability was Europe. The other four countries accounted for similar numbers. It is clear to see that the total number of
oil
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 production in the middle east was by far the highest, nearly a quarter of the total amount, with 22.2(
MB
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/D). And the second-ranking producing
oil
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 was the American and Canadian areas, with a total of 14(
MB
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/D).
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, the lowest amount of
oil
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 production was in Europe, with merely 6.8(
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/D).
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, the Asia pacific (xx
MB
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/D) was twice that of the region of Latin America.
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, the
oil
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 contribution from the other three countries was not significant with the numbers 8,8 and 8.7 respectively.
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