The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below describes some changes about the percentage of people were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart illustrates the number of the population born inside and outside
Australia
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who are living in the city centre, countryside and municipality by percentage between 1995 and 2010.
Overall
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, the majority of them were born outside
Australia
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and lived in the cities in both years,
whereas
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people born outside and in
Australia
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are unlikely to live in the
towns
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and rural areas.
Furthermore
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, most public in and outside
Australia
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in 1995 lived in cities and
towns
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50% and 60% respectively,
while
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others prefer in rural areas with 30% in
Australia
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and 40% outside
Australia
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. ,
Also
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least percentage of the crowd lives in
towns
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with 20% in
Australia
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and 10% outside the country in the same year,
however
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, in 2010, it is seen that there is a dramatic decrease in the population living in rural areas and
towns
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with less than 15% in and out of the nation,
while
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folk are still likely to live in the cities with 80% outside and 70% in the country.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, towns with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Percentage
  • Demographic
  • Trends
  • Urban areas
  • Rural areas
  • Town
  • Native-born
  • Foreign-born
  • Migration patterns
  • Economic factors
  • Government policies
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Steady
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Time frame
  • Significant changes
  • Distribution
  • Notable
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