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Some people believe that museums should be free for everyone and not charge an entry free. To what extent do you agree?

#people #museums #charge #entry
Museums
 offer us the opportunity to learn about a variety of subject areas in more depth,
such
 as history or nature.
While
 it is possible to go to some
gallery
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 for free, the majority of them require a visitor's fee.
This
 essay will argue that all
museums
 should be free to everyone. One reason is that
museums
 are an excellent source of education. They help us to understand our culture, and other
people
's culture, better by displaying objects from our past.
For example
, at the British ,Museum you can see objects from around the world which help us to understand world history. When institutions charge
people
 to enter, not everyone is able to pay and so fewer
people
 have the opportunity to learn about that past. Another reason is that when a museum charges, it only really affects
people
 on lower incomes in society. Wealthier
people
 will be able to afford to visit and as a,
the
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result will become more educated.
However
,
people
 on lower incomes will be less likely to afford a visit and will
therefore
 not benefit from the museum in the same way. The effect of
this
 is that not anybody has the same educational opportunities as others in our society. In conclusion, I would suggest that free entry to
museums
 allows everyone to learn about history and culture.
However
,for
this
 to be possible, the government will have to provide funding for the
museums
. Without money from visitors or government funds,
museums
 will not be able to find, buy, take care of or display historical objects.
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