Some people think that in order to prevent illness and disease, governments should make efforts in reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
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era of globalisation, some individuals believe that authorities should make efforts to cope with environmental pollution and housing issues in order to avoid dangerous
diseases
or
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. From my personal point of view, I agreed with the statement aforementioned above because pollution and overpopulation increase the chance of infection.
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elaborate my points and
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lead to a logical conclusion. Supporting my agreement
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the given statement, I firmly think that there
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huge
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possibility that the
diseases
such
as asthma, respiratory problems and fever come from our
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. As the number of populations
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in the city area, the use of motor vehicles
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suprisingly
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high. To cite an example, the carbon dioxide or
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comes
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from cars, buses and motors
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to air
pollutions
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which in
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give
a negative impacts
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on
people
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health.
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, people are can easily catch
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sick and afraid of getting outside. Explaining other points in favour
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this
statement is the residential sector
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to major illness.
For instance
, when housing projects are made by property companies, it will increase the number of rubbish being thrown in the cities.
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, if the
governments
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unable to tackle
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this
situation, it will become the major
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of serious
diseases
such
as malaria, dengue fever and tuberculosis that are
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by virus infection. To summarise, it is true that the reason
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dangerous
diseases
comes from housing problems and human pollution. The best approaches to deal with it are to educate people about its damaging effects and
thus
for the government to take
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serious action
upon
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this
matter.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • respiratory problems
  • adequate heating
  • renewable energy
  • infrastructure
  • transboundary pollution
  • stringent regulations
  • affordable housing
  • environmental regulations
  • healthcare costs
  • quality of life
  • overcrowding
  • damp
  • mental health issues
  • societal benefits
  • productivity
  • enforcement
  • international cooperation
  • health issues
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