These days, it is pervasive to have people from two different generations mix in ‎the same workplace. Are there more advantages or disadvantages to this ‎situation? Give your own opinion and include relevant examples.‎

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two
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the offices get
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company
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older person but
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a longer period that individual has a depth
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innovative
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which can help
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to have better
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. So
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a
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in work the  place
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long
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guidance regarding
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workplace ethics which can
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maintain
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  real estate company of the country
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Lodha . I am working as
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sales executive officer so , there was
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jumbled  situation
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while
approaching the client for the luxurious apartment
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because the client want the house as per the vastu shastra
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denied
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we can't make any change in your apartment
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the customer was taking the back foot to close the deal . As
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my senior authority got the conversation by my words he told me that the
firm
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shastra .
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manager help me and told
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close the deal because
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can harm the reputation of the
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we were providing the apartment
accordingly
vastu shastra but ,
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we have to adjust the construction .
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this
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generation has a lot
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knowledge of the
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and they can guide very well .
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me that there are
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benefits
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benefits
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the
two
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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