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The two maps demonstrate the illustrations of university sports courts in the years of 1990 and 2023

The two maps demonstrate the illustrations of university sports courts in the years
of
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1990 and 2023 respectively. Looking from an
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that major changes had been made to all over the sports
court
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: the indoor
pool
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 had replaced the outdoor one, changing room had been lengthened and the
park
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, as well as the car park,
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as well as
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 the car
park
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 had been removed in order to place basketball tennis
court
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. In 1990, there existed a
park
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 with grassland and trees which was replaced with a basketball
court
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 as the car
park
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 had been replaced with a tennis
court
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 by now. The indoor
pool
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 had been relocated to a place of an outdoor
pool
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,
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 the length of changing room had been increased moving slightly to the right side above a fitness centre, which both were replacements for tennis courts from 1990. The only two places that had been unchanged are the café and reception. The border had been built limiting the indoor
pool
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, changing room, fitness centre and unchanged goods.

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