The graph shows the types of games people play in some country over a 7 year time period.

The graph shows the types of games people play in some country over a 7 year time period.
The given bar chart depicts which type of
games
individuals used to play from 2000 to 2006.
Overall
, we can see that handheld
games
were the most popular during the 7-
year
period.
While
, handheld, mobile phones and online
games
have experienced an increase in their use, console
games
saw an upward trend. In 2000, only two
games
were available: handheld and console
games
. The former was the most played game of the
year
with almost 12 billion
sales
, which was twice more than console
games
. In 2001, online
games
were introduced, even though they had almost no
sales
. A
year
later, there was the introduction of a new type of game on mobile phones, which has the same amount of
sales
as online
games
in 2002. In the first four years,
while
console
games
slightly decreased, the other three types saw a rise in their numbers. In the next four years, it can be seen a gradual fall in the number of
sales
made by console
games
, which decreased by almost 50% compared to the first
year
.
Otherwise
, if mobile phone
games
were the second most used ones in 2005, in the following
year
, online
games
dramatically rose to 8 billion
sales
overcoming the mobile
games
’ figure.
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