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The line graph illustrates three different kind of crimes that occurred in Newport city centre between 2003 and 2012.

The line graph illustrates three different kind of crimes that occurred in Newport city centre between 2003 and 2012.
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The line graph gives information about three
difference
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kind
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 of murder that
happen
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 in Newport city
center
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centre
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 from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
, it can be seen that the incidents
is
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high
level
 in Newport city
also
, during a
period
 of time
burglary
has
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 a main
crime
. The
crime
 rates have
big
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a big
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 portion all
years
 that situation
is relate
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with
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economy
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. These days developing countries and
low budget
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 states have
enormously
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an enormously
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 criminal
level
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.
Moreover
, many governments
are
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struggle
that
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 tendency
for
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the
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reason they have
responsible
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 in front of
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the human
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human
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. On the one hand, in 2003
the
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burglary
 and
car
theft
 are more
superiority
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than
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to
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 robbery. In the
mean
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meantime
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time
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 the
burglary
 number is just under 3500 but
car
theft
 is just above 2500.
Also
, next a
period
 of time
burglary
an
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 sudden increase reached a peak
3600
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of 3600
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 in 2004.
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 the
burglary
 have a substantial decline till 2008.
The
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 four
years
 of
period
 that
crime
 fluctuate between 2008 and 2012
The
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car
theft
 is a remain stable until 2005
while
, the
car
theft
a
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gradual growth until 2010
then
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level
 and
gentle
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 fall hit a low.
Nvertheless
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Nevertheless
 the robbery
crime
 is
same
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level
nine
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years
 of
period
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the period
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 but that
years
 the violation of the law
fluctuate
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 from 2003 to 2012.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words level, period, burglary, crime, years, car, theft with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recorded
  • trends
  • criminal activity
  • categories
  • theft
  • assault
  • vandalism
  • graph
  • x-axis
  • y-axis
  • number of crimes
  • visual representation
  • changes
  • crime rates
  • fluctuating pattern
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