Some people feels that entertainer such as film stars, pop musicians or sports starts are paid too much money. 1. Do you agree or disagree. 2.Which other types of jobs should be highly paid.

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My self Ankit
sahu
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I belong to India .I live in Bhilai in the state of Chhattisgarh in a family
home
along with
my parents.My
home
town
is very small.
However
, my
home
town
is famous for the BSP which is Asia's largest steel plant.My
home
town
is very near to my village and we went our
home
town
very frequently,usually every weekend and
thus
I have an unbreakable bond with my
home
town
.
Moreover
, the food and agriculture sectors are very important
for
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me since my childhood because most of the revenue in the family comes from
these sector
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. In fact, we have a lot of cattle in my
home
and
due to
this
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I was very fascinated with the dairy sector .
due to
all these , a fact I decided to pursue my education after the completion of the 12th class in the field of the dairy sector and I decided to choose the Dairy technology course. I was very satisfied with my decision because in the whole course
of
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4 ,year I not only understand and grab knowledge of classroom theoretical parts but
also
aids to learn a lot of practical knowledge. Well,
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