Some people believe that a great difference in age between people and children is more beneficial. Do you think the advantages of a greater difference in age between them outweigh the disadvantages?

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would like to show some glimpse of my practical exposure In the first year in the second ,semester I-_ learned how to procure milk for the plant at that time we
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raw milk.
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around 40 km far from our college campus.
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  • financial security
  • emotional maturity
  • life experience
  • extracurricular opportunities
  • career establishment
  • flexibility
  • generation gap
  • energy levels
  • health complications
  • optimal
  • stable environment
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