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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of travelling to a workplace every day. Do you think the advantages of working from home outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations,
however
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 governments of richer
countries
 should help them or not is what I am
neautral
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neutral
 about. None of the
country
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countries
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 observed is operating solely on its own. Loans and investments have been and are still part and
that is
 what keeps all the
countries
 tied together. Even the most developed nations require their primary services from underdeveloped
countries
. I feel if
government
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 starts helping
countries
 too much
then
 developing
countries
 will not be able to take responsibility for their actions and doings and they will always know if something goes wrong there is some other powerful country to look after them. And
at the end
 of the day, where is all the money going which is coming in
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the forms
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forms
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 of remittances or loans
due to
 any
casualities
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casualties
.
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 It is human nature that once given help one tends to exploit it in any and every way possible. But that does not mean I stand completely against it, often
due to
any
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apply
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natural calamities or times like Covid
countries
 might require help from one another but I suppose that should be the
last
 resort.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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