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Today more and more tourist are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as Sahara or the antartic. Discuss advantage and disadvantage for tourist who visit these places.

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Now days
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 many
tourists
 visiting overseas countries
also
, they
traveling
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travelling
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 own country.
Moreover
, many
people
 going
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a journey
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journey
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journeys
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which
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in which
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 situations are hard namely Sahara or the
antartic
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antarctic
. That tendency has a number of
benefit
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benefits
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,
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but
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however
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 there are
also
 some drawbacks
as well as
, will now be discussed.
A
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 first possible advantage is a
lot
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persons
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person
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 going to
difference
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different
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state
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states
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especially
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 hot areas. In the
meantime
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 each human has curious
for
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about
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 travelling. The journey gives experience to the visitors for the reason, every human needs to see new fields and things
such
 as mountains, waterfall, ocean, sea and
others
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other
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 activities.
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 every year millions of
people
 visiting
to
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in Turkey and that tendency has
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a benefit
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benefit
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benefits
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 for turkey and
population
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the population
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 of turkey,
specially
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especially
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economy
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the economy
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 and transportation fields
continiously
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continuously
 improving. Another possible benefit is
human
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humans
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recognize
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to recognize
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 new
culture
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cultures
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 and
meal
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meals
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in addition
to
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apply
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, the
tourists
 have communication with
inhabitats
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inhabitants
.
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 each year the
chinese
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Chinese
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people
 visit
to
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apply
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new
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a new
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 state and exchange new information.
That
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What
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 activities provide enjoyment feelings and give benefits all around
persons
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people
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. Turning the disadvantages is
crime
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a crime
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 because
tourist
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tourists
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go
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goes
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 to
new
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a new
the new
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place
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places
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 and
this
 is impact
visitors
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visitors'
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 life. Indeed
the
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apply
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most
countiries
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countries
people
 have aggressive
to
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with
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tourists
, so
that
is increase
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increases
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 crime and
damage
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damages
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to
prestige
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the prestige
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 of
country
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the country
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.
For example
 the state share statistical data every year and thousands of
tourists
killed
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are killed
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 by indigenous persons.
Second
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drawbacks
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drawback
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 is
navigation
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the navigation
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 problem
although
, these days have a
lot
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oflot
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 apps
that is
helpfull
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helpful
 for
the
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apply
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visitor.
For instance
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the
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apply
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more
nature
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natural
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 area border dangerous thing
and
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that is
 caused death. In
conclusion
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 there are have
number
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a number
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 of advantages above discuss and give some disadvantages
also
, debate problem and
causings
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causing
casings
causes
.
At the end
 of
period
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the period
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 travelling is the best way
for
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apply
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to rest
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