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Staff members should be given an executive postions Do you agree with that?

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Industries hire employees in masses and claim to provide a chance to help them progress with time.
However
, it is seen that most
staff
 members never get promoted to the executive
level
 in companies despite serving long years and delivering good performances.
This
 prompted some people to believe that a change is much needed and employees should be considered.
However
, I completely disagree with
this
 notion.
This
 essay will discuss
reasons
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 in detail and justify my stance.
Although
 some believe that
this
 will cultivate a hope of promotions and will drive employees to work even harder to push their limits,
but
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the work at
business
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the business
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level
 of companies is entirely different to that of operations or associate
level
. Former requires more management skills than technical expertise which
staff
 usually do not possess.
For example
, promoting customer service associates into Executives will be more than a challenging job for them. At the same time, it will
also
 shatter their confidence in their ability.
Thus
, it is best suited for
staff
 to be working in the department of their expertise.
Furthermore
, those who work at
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level
 are involved in making decisions at an organisational
level
.
Hence
,
margin
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the margin
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 of error is incessantly minimal as it can potentially disrupt the
overall
 functioning and finances of companies. A good illustration of
this
 is the fact that Elon Musk lost 17 billion dollars because of a minute mistake of ignoring the security risks for a couple of hours.
Therefore
, individuals with proven
record
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 and relevant educational
background
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 are
more
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ideal candidates for
such
 designations than
staff
 .
To conclude
, there are several reasons why
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 is not promoted to
executive
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the executive
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level
 in most businesses. Not only the skillset required to thrive at
business
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the business
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level
 is different, but
also
 one wrong decision may jeopardise businesses.
Submitted by Mohammed Danishuddin on

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