Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsary part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Unpaid
community
service is a topic of discussion. I strongly agree that it should be a part of high school programmes. The first reason would be about
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,
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because in
this
case
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students learn how to react
with
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different people and
also
how to treat people
in
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different ages and feelings.
For instance
, when a middle age student put their time
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one
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work
which will not have
salary
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, it means that goal of
this
requirement is just a chance to improve themselves. Like a student who
guide
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new
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student in school. So,
community
service can improve
behavior
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. The second reason is going to be about
the
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learning about
from
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this
situation which is
do
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not
work
for
money
due to
human life is not about
money
, it is about living. When someone
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in a place, they might
to
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love that
work
to make their dreams come true.
For instance
, a person who works for a charity which is not paid is so satisfied whit his
work
due to
helping others with no
paid
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.
Hence
, in
this
case
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people can learn how to enjoy their life with no attention to
money
. Some may argue that unpaid
community
should not be obligatory because they do not want to make
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on their children.
However
, it is hard for that age but as soon as they encounter
to
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hard things and
works
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that may not have
salary
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, they would
be grow
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. In conclusion, I agree with unpaid
community
service
which
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should be obligatory for two
reason
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,
first,
it would be about
behavior
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and
the
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second is about do not
work
for
money
.
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