The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram shows how

water

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is collected in rainy weather and how a system turns it to be drinkable

water

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again in an Australian town.

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, it can be seen that there are a few steps needed in public facilities including filtering, storage and treatment.

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when it is raining, rainwater will be collected into the pine systems installed on the top of houses. the collected

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then

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flows to the drain which is under the houses.

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the

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collected by other families will flow into the public pine system together and

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transits to a massive storage container after it filters out some pollutants primitively.

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the stored

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then

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be transferred to other facilities for

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treatment. In

this

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step, some synthetic chemicals will be added to

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, the purified

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can be provided back directly to the families in

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town to use again being drinking

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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4 paragraphs

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