Write about the following topic: In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Some
people
support the idea of big investment
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investments
on
expanding new railroads for Change preposition
in
high speed
trains between cities. Add a hyphen
high-speed
In contrast
, some argue it should be fund
to improve the existing transportation Wrong verb form
funded
system
. If we use an example from developing
Correct article usage
a developing
country
like Thailand, improving original
commune Correct article usage
the original
system
is a better solution.
In many developed countries, high speed
Add a hyphen
high-speed
train
is alredy
Correct your spelling
already
a
daily transportation Correct article usage
apply
tools
. Correct the article-noun agreement
tool
For example
, Japanese people
took Shinkanzen
, known as Correct your spelling
Shinkansen
bullet
Add an article
the bullet
a bullet
train
, to work daily. Because developed countries already have efficient public transport systems, expanding new route
for fast trains became their current goal. Fix the agreement mistake
routes
In contrast
, if we turn our focus to developing
Add an article
a developing
country
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countries
such
as Thailand, you
will see a huge Correct pronoun usage
we
different
. Facing unpleasant traffic Replace the word
difference
jam
, Thai Fix the agreement mistake
jams
people
really hope to reduce time spent on the road as much as possible. However
, Bangkok's subway or above ground
Add a hyphen
above-ground
train
is not yet well developed, thus
, office workers choose to commute using private vehicles.
From a developing country
perspective, by increasing the number of routes and stations, commuters can travel conveniently. Because the original
constructed routes are already based on Change the adjective
originally
people
's preference
, the government should pay for additional Fix the agreement mistake
preferences
train
route constructions, extended
from the main one, and strengthen the Wrong verb form
extend
existed
Replace the word
existing
system
. For example
, the blue subway line in Bangkok is convenient for workers who work in the downtown area, but in convenient for employees working in the suburb
area, Replace the word
suburban
which
there is no subway line.
In conclusion, the Correct word choice
where
important
of funding depends on the situation of that Replace the word
importance
country
. If it is a well developed
Add a hyphen
well-developed
country
, expanding new
Correct article usage
a new
route
is better. Fix the agreement mistake
routes
However
, if it is an under-developing country
, strengthen existed transportation system
must be Fix the agreement mistake
systems
prioritize
.Wrong verb form
prioritised
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