Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, many
courses
are available in universities which confuses
students
. Some
people
argue
students
take the
courses
whatever they like
while
, others argue only they choose their subjects which is
benificial
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beneficial
in
future
,
such
as those related to science and
technology
. I agree with the first opinion. In
this
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i
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will go through,
while
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how
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students
who choose science and
technology
subjects will earn more money in
future
,
as well as
students
who choose their favourite subject are
achive
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achieve
archive
many things in
future
.
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a student
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student
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who
study
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demanding
courses
will earn more money in
future
. Because
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the
a
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world
in
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is
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moving too fast science and
technology
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technological
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advancement is growing too fast
than
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then
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we think.
MNC
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MNCs
,s
needs
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skilled employees
those
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who already had
a
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good knowledge
in
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of
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technology
so they paid more.
For example
, In
india
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average
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the average
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IT
empoyee
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employee
salary is three times more than other field workers.
For
this
reason
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parents push their children to choose
courses
which
is
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are
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useful in
future
.
However
, apart from the salary
people
who love their job will
acheive
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achieve
more in their carrier. I agree with
this
opinion. because
persons
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people
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puts
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lot
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a lot
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of effort and
hardwork
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hard work
only if they liked which gives lots of
achivements
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achievements
and
name
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in
ther
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the
their
carrier,
for example
, one of the famous director in Tamilnadu,
vijay
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who directs the film "
uriyadi
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teriyaki
"
he
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apply
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resining their IT job and enter into the film industry and now he is
successfull
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successful
in their carrier.
Likewise
,
its
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it
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also
gives peace and happy life. If
people
really enjoy their jobs, they easily face the challenges and
no
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need to wait for the weekends because they
enjoys
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every single day in these jobs.
For instance
, research conducted by
harward
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Harvard
Harward
university,
people
will live long when they do their job without stress. In conclusion, earning money is important to lead a life but
also
passionated jobs are more important than that.
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  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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