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Some people believe that students work better if the teacher is strict; others think it is better for students, if the teacher has a friendly approach. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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People have various beliefs and
approach
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 towards life in general.
While
 it works for some students to accept the challenge when teachers are strict, others seem to be in trouble and not open up at all. I personally feel the teacher should be easygoing or at least should be flexible from student to student.
However
, In
this
 ,essay we will discuss both aspects and outcomes of teaching. There is a chunk of students, who are unable to cope with strict-natured tutors.
Reason
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 is they are introverts or shy discussing their problems and putting them in front of someone who may not have a friendly nature.
Such
 students either stay quiet or do not participate at all, fearing they will be humiliated and become uncomfortable. Or,
eventually
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 they may even switch classes/schools.
On the other hand
, there are extroverts and outgoing, who believe in the idea of coming what may and they face it. In ,fact in many ,instances they look up to their strict tutors and question them back. Those are the kind who explore themselves and question everything in life
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 because
that is
 their way of learning new things, Questioning is the key to learning for them. I believe a professor should know which approach works for an individual and treat them
accordingly
.
While
 some may become disheartened by the strict perspective , others may not be able to explore themselves to their full potential
due to
 the friendly viewpoint.
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