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Some people argue that girls and boys should be educated separately, while others think that it is more advantageous for children to study at the same school. What is your opinion?

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"For some people, it is more advantageous for
children
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 to study at the same
school
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,
while
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 for others,
girls
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 and
boys
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 should be educated separately. Everybody is free to give their opinion. Of course, there are pros and cons to the two options. In a same-
gender
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school
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, students would be more disciplined and focused only on their learning. When they are studying with the same
gender
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, there wouldn't be any distractions, like we know the first love starts in the early years of the person and
usually
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 that happens in
school
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.
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, in my opinion, it is not always better to isolate
children
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 from the opposite
gender
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.
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, I think it is a better idea for them to study in a
school
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 with both
girls
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 and
boys
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. In
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 way, they will be well-informed about their surroundings. Young people won't be so isolated in traditional schools like in same-
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 schools.
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,
girls
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 and
boys
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 are completely different, and every
gender
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 can take some knowledge from the opposite. They can brainstorm ideas better,
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girls
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 think with one part of the brain and
boys
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 with the other. The world is so
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, and I think that it is really important to give our
children
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 the chance to explore it, meet more people, and get to know the opposite
gender
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. In conclusion, for me, separate education has some pros, but traditional schools are more advantageous and give
children
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 the chance to explore the world more freely."

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Single-sex education
  • Gender stereotypes
  • Co-educational system
  • Social development
  • Gender equality
  • Psychological impacts
  • Collaborative skills
  • Diversity of opinions
  • Comprehensive social development
  • Equal access to resources
  • Educational environment
  • Distractions
  • Real-world scenarios
  • Academic advantages
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