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Success is often measured by wealth and material possessions. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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success means not only winning ,
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 measuring the thing , which we like ,it shows a human's dedication towards an aim ,some tasks may need team cooperation. In life everybody should have a dream, that only they can struggle towards it,to achieve the target, winning means showing dedication to the goal we set,and stepping on the path even though it's hard,in the world so many are there ,who won the gold medals in the sports at the Olympics,
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 not achieved in the single day ,the success came from their so many days practice and hard work of them. on the other ,hand some are grown in the business, that spread all over the world with great achievement and profits
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 called business tactics,who can able to know the public puls only they can win in the employment
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when the price is reachable for the middle class or lower-middle-class people that field always blossoms and will achieve 100 % sales.
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 called accomplishment.
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 in a team every person is not equally talented but the leader should make an effort to get done and bring the name to the team.that makes a person get successful. In ,conclusion success is not only winning , but it should
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 reach all hierarchy of people from below to high,and everyone in the country can be happy and enjoy that achievement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Affluence
  • Materialism
  • Fulfillment
  • Well-being
  • Philanthropy
  • Societal norms
  • Personal growth
  • Economic power
  • Subjective
  • Humanitarian
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