How do the two pie charts illustrate the proportion of industrial contribution of factors to the economy of Turkey in 2000 and 2016.?
Two pie charts compared how much contribution was provided to Turkey's economy in various
industry
fields from the year 2000 to 2016.
Overall
, while
healthcare and education's percentage was
stable, the ratio of agriculture, which held the highest ratio, decreased. Correct subject-verb agreement
were
This
decrement resulted from the rise of construction, manufacturing, trade and transportation, and finance percentage combined.
The agricultural sector used to be the largest contributor among all sectors, at almost one-fourth of the whole. Similar to agriculture's contribution, government and leisure's contributions also
faced a 3% drop, from 12% down to 9% and from 17% down to 14% respectively.
On the other hand
,the 4 sector's performances have increased. With the greatest growth at 7%, construction's contribution raised from 3% to 10% in 2016. At the same time, throughout these 16 years periods, the manufacturing industry
also
climbed from 8% to 12%. Not only the utilities and transportation sector,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
the finance and business industry
experienced the smallest growth among all contributors. Lastly
, by keeping the same ratio at 17%, the healthcare industry
did not change.Submitted by purita.w on
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