You have seen an advertisement in Australian magazines for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child write a letter # Explain why you would like this # Give detail of why you are a suitable person to employ # Say how would you spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear Sir, I am writing to you with regards
about
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an advertisement
to
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looking after your six-year child. First and foremost, I am
an
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living in
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Park Avenue, Sydney near your home. I
done
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a course in childcare
last
year.
Main
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reason behind my interest is that I am looking for
job
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a job
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because
previous
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family moved
in
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other state
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another state
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due
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and due
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to that I have to leave that
work
. Moving on, I find
me
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myself suitable for
this
work
because I
also
did training in
this
field
also
have
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experience. I know how to behave with children and about their diet. I had gain
this
knowledge through
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course.
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, I
also
have
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reference
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from
previous
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family.
Finally
, whenever I get free time during the weekends at that time
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went to
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centre situated in the centre of the city and spent time with
children
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the children
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. Well, I found
this
work
very interesting, if you find me suitable for
this
work
and required any
further
information please contact me. My email id is [email protected]. I am looking forward to hearing from you . Yours sincerely, Sauna
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