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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts demonstrate the
age
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 of
Yemen
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 and Italy citizens in 2000 and 50-year forecasts as a percentage. In 2000 in
Yemen
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 youngsters occupied half of the pie chart,
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 in Italy they hold only 14.3 per cent. Yemenis, whose
age
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 is 15-59 hold approximately half of the chart (46.3%) , though in Italy middle-aged
age
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people
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 were the overwhelming majority of the
population
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 (61.6). The smallest
age
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group
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 in
Yemen
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 was older
people
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it
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holds
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 only 3.6%, but in
Italy
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 it contains almost a quarter of the
population
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. To projections, middle-aged
people
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 will contain the majority of the
population
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 in
Yemen
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. The percentage of young Yemenis will decrease by 13 per cent and the oldest
group
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 will have a tiny growth of 2%. In Italy can be seen another trend. The number of older
people
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 will be doubled. The percentage of the
population
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 of
people
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 aged 15-59 will decrease by a quarter. And the young-ones
population
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 will have a slight decline. In conclusion, there will be an increase in middle-aged
people
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 in
Yemen
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 ,
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 in Italy the opposite tendency can be seen. The smallest
group
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 in
Yemen
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 will continue to be the smallest , but in
Italy
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this
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group
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 will double. The
group
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, which was the largest in
Yemen
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 in 2000 ,predictably, will decline by 13% in 2050.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, yemen, people, population, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • population pyramid
  • projections
  • young population
  • aging population
  • demographic shift
  • increase in elderly population
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • population dynamics
  • top-heavy
  • balanced age distribution
  • healthcare needs
  • pension provision
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