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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts demonstrate the
age
 of
Yemen
 and Italy citizens in 2000 and 50-year forecasts as a percentage. In 2000 in
Yemen
 youngsters occupied half of the pie chart,
while
 in Italy they hold only 14.3 per cent. Yemenis, whose
age
 is 15-59 hold approximately half of the chart (46.3%) , though in Italy middle-aged
age
people
 were the overwhelming majority of the
population
 (61.6). The smallest
age
group
 in
Yemen
 was older
people
it
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 only 3.6%, but in
Italy
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 it contains almost a quarter of the
population
. To projections, middle-aged
people
 will contain the majority of the
population
 in
Yemen
. The percentage of young Yemenis will decrease by 13 per cent and the oldest
group
 will have a tiny growth of 2%. In Italy can be seen another trend. The number of older
people
 will be doubled. The percentage of the
population
 of
people
 aged 15-59 will decrease by a quarter. And the young-ones
population
 will have a slight decline. In conclusion, there will be an increase in middle-aged
people
 in
Yemen
 ,
while
 in Italy the opposite tendency can be seen. The smallest
group
 in
Yemen
 will continue to be the smallest , but in
Italy
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this
group
 will double. The
group
, which was the largest in
Yemen
 in 2000 ,predictably, will decline by 13% in 2050.
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