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You and your family visit the local shopping mall every week. However, it has become more and more difficult to find a parking spot recently. You would like to let the shopping mall manager know about this problem. Your email should do the following things: Describe the problem you are having with the mall’s parking. Explain what you and your family have to do in order to visit the shopping mall now. Provide some suggestions for how the mall manager can solve this problem.

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Dear Sir/Ma, Yesterday evening, My wife, teenage son and I went to the
mall
 to buy a gift for my son in celebration of his excellent grade and profound performance in the completion of the 4th-grade exam. More so, we have visited the Victoria shopping
mall
 numerous times in the past and noticed the great decline in the availability of packing space, but our experience yesterday was the worst we have ever had.
Hence
 I will kindly crave your indulgence to utilize
this
 medium to express my complaint and seek a solution.
Firstly
, I will need to inform you that we had to drive around the packing centre for approximately an hour, with no possible chance of securing a packing space.
Hence
this
 was quite exhausting and frustrating.
This
 situation
further
 led to us packing over 10 miles away from the
mall
 and quite a distance to walk down to Victoria
Mall
.
Furthermore
, for our next visit which we had planned for next tomorrow the 5th, we would need to commute to the
mall
 via public transport to avoid the problem reoccurring.
Finally
, I will like to suggest for strict packing laws and an increase in packing tariffs be imposed.
Hence
,
this
 will prevent overcrowding of the
Mall
.
Also
, for
further
 information please kindly contact me at 555-445-77888. Regards, Olayonu oluwatimilehin
Submitted by olayonuoluwatimilehin on

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