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Most countries believes that international tourism has harmful effects . Why do they think so? How to change their views.

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In the modern world ,
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 has grown significantly in countries . Some nations assume that global
tourism
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 is causing damaging effects on each
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.
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ways to change it.
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 with, the main reason why some people oppose
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tourism
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 as a negative element is because of the pollution caused by
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 in certain countries. As we can see that when
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 go to different places. They use to carry different plastic materials like plastic bags and bottles for different purposes ; which they throw
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 the surroundings after
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use , thereby creating pollution in that area.
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, when a place
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tourists
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 attraction to people , it will affect the local economy of that area ; by increasing the price of
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local goods and house rents in that location.
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, forcing the local people to move and shift to a new place, where they can afford a suitable living.
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, there are certain ways in which we can change
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 , if
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 go to a location
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 they to ensure that they are avoiding the use of plastic materials to reduce the pollution rates caused by the
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 , and the higher authorities should
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 guarantee that travellers are not utilizing
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non-degradable products
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traveling
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 to different places .
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, visitors should
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 support the local economy by purchasing
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art facts and other items from citizens without bargaining with them.
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, they can pay for
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living in that area.
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 are so many problems that are caused by
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tourism
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 nowadays.
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 ,
it is clear that
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 there are certain ways that
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 can be changed with the help of travellers and governments because
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 is an important factor that a nation needs.
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